The one that I admire
Introduction:
Of course, I would like to say that my English teacher gave this task to me, but not. I can not say that cause I been taught that lies are bad.
This task was given by teacher from another grouping of learning, they're from grouping A and I'm from A+, but, honestly, I don't really feel that I'm that good in English.
Anyway, since I love to write, and since this task was perfect to me, I decided to dedicated some time and write down my feelings.
In the original task she said somewhere between 7 to 15 lines but believe me, this is SO not my kind.
So, now, after I've wrote such a long introduction, here is the one that I admire:
I admire a young boy called "Sahar". He is a 13 years old boy, and he is my best friend.
One of the most amazing thing about him is the fact that he is unique and also talented.
First of all, the thing that makes him to be happy, is seen his dad smiling.
Isn't it just an amazing fact?
I bet with you that most of the kids in our class, some of them are wishing that their father wouldn't bother them, but still.
Another amazing thing about Sahar, is his shyness.
Sahar is very coy, and I think it shows something about him.
Also, he is very smart. he doing great in math, athletic, physics, chimestry and he is just amazing in English.
He is the reason why I suddenly turns to be good in English.
I've never had above 90 in a test in the seventh grade, until he helped me, and I've got 106 in my last test.
Sahar deserves to be admired, cause he is such an unique and undescribeable.
Admire is too weak to say about him.
תגובות (5)
Awww! It's so nice of you to write about a friend!
Sahar sound's like a perfect friend!
Some of these sentences made me laugh!
But there is one little thing that isn't correct [YOU MAY KILL ME!] ,you wrote:"i decided to dedicated some…" you'r suppose to write: dedicate.
I'm pretty sure you know the reason for the correction, or you just typed another letter…
I wanted to ask you a question:if you are on the A+ group how come you think you'r not good at English?
First of all thank you for fixing me. I know how to write dedicate, but I guess I havn't pay attention.
And I don't think that I'm good in English cause I still have a mountain of mistakes. Anyway, I do my best to improve my knowledge.
Thank you so much for this comment.
Hehe i knew it! I knew you know [to much KNOW's] how to write it!
I guess you'r welcome!
Oh, one more thing: You'r English is very good! Do you have any English relatives? D: sorry for bothering…
Hello Orr,
Listen, it's supposed to be "The One WHOM I Admire" or "The One I Admire"
The word THAT is not for people, only for objects.
When you want to make the word "Because" shorted you write " 'caus" OK?
Since this task was perfect FOR me, not TO me.
One of the most amazing THINGS about him, not thing. You are talking about ONE of MANY.
The thing that makes HIM HAPPY. Not makes him TO BE happy.
He IS doing great AT math.
He is the reason why I suddenly TURNED… You are talking about the PAST.
Admire is too weak to say about him.
Admire is a verb. You can't use it this way. Maybe… "Amazing is too MILD to say about him"
weak doesn't describe words.
Except from that, you are alright! well done. I've seen some great improvements.
Well done Orr.
Sincerely, Lisa.
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