You disappeared
They don't understand you.
They don't understand what you really want.
You want to walk far away and hide yourself, till they will find you.
But you want to hide forever.
In the moonlight, you sit and think, you want to come back, but you don't know how. You are afraid.
And than, you lose yourself.
You lose your life, you lose all you have.
And one day, after one thousand years, you disappeared forever.
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אני ארשה לעצמי לתקן:
הכותרת שגויה:
You disappeared.
They don't understand what you really wanna.
wanna זה סלנג של "Want to" וזה לא מתאים כאן. פשוט תשני את wanna ל – want.
But you want hide forever.
But you want TO hide forever.
In the moon light
moonlight היא מילה אחת.
you loses yourself.
you LOSE yourself.
את ה – S מוסיפים אחרי הפועל רק בגוף שלישי.
You loses your life, you loses all what you have.
שוב פעם, להוריד את ה – s אחרי ה – lose, והמילה "what" מיותרת.
you disappeared to forever
אין צורך ב – to.
והסיפור יפה!