DarkSideGirl
אולי זה קצת קשה עם כל האנגלית, אך אני מאמינה בעלילה הזו
ומקווה כמו כל אחד שזה יקרה לי
תספרו לי מה אתם חושבים :)

ג'יין והנער שמעולם לא היה קיים

DarkSideGirl 11/07/2012 1169 צפיות 8 תגובות
אולי זה קצת קשה עם כל האנגלית, אך אני מאמינה בעלילה הזו
ומקווה כמו כל אחד שזה יקרה לי
תספרו לי מה אתם חושבים :)

Jane felt more alone in the world than anyone. She looked outside her window- at the night sky, sadly, and shed a tear on the window page. Suddenly she saw him- a boy, strange looking and a sweet smile. He had brown hair and green eyes, and a look upon his face said he was happy to see Jane.
She asked him "why are you here? Who are you, boy?"
The boy looked at her sadly, then smiled quickly and said "we'll get to that later. Come with me to see who you're meant to be". Jane hesitated for a moment, and then asked with a little doubt" Where are we going?".
"To a great place" said the boy and lands her his hand. Jane looked at him. "You didn't answer my question."
"Jane- just come" he lands her his hand again.
"I'm not coming anywhere! I don't even know you or your name" answered him Jane, with a serious look upon her face.
The boy looked at her strangely and said:" but you do know me, don't you remember?".
"Remember? Remember what?" asked Jane.
"I'm from a dream, your dream".
Jane looked frightened and confused.
"You're crazy! You must be joking, I remember all of my dreams and I've never seen you in my whole life" she looked at him.
The mysterious boy smiled at her- he started laughing. "What?" said Jane angrily "what's so funny?".
The boy thought and then said "I don't know how to explain this, well; I was in your dreams when you were a little child. You had a little crush on me- it was cute. You were cute".
" I don't remember you. So, if you're from my dream, how can you be in my room?".
"If you have to know everything, come with me and figure out" said the boy with a smiling look on his face. Jane finally stood up, said "I trust you then", and lands him her hand slowly.

Suddenly, in a single blink, Jane and the boy found themselves in an old building that looked like a motel. "Where are we?" she asked.
"This is the beginning of our story" the boy whispered.
"What do you mean?".
"I'll show you. But first you should know that we're in the past" the boy said.
Jane shoved the boy against the wall and said "what do you mean in the past?"
The boy smiled and said "you know what, I lied. You didn't have a crush on me- I had a crush on you".
"You were the same age as you are today when I was a kid, weren't you? How could you have a crush on me?" Jane asked.
"If you look there you'll see" he said, pointing to the right side.
Jane saw what she never thought she saw again. She saw herself when she was 10 years old with her parents at the reception. Her parents tried to ask for a room and she was sitting on the suitcase, playing with her red rubies ring- which she was wearing as she was watching herself. "Weird, I remember this. This is our vacation from 5 years ago" she said, playing too with her ring.
Suddenly, Jane saw her little self talking to a little brown haired and green eyed boy. He looked similar to the grown boy that was standing next to her.
Little Jane smiled and kissed him on the chick; the little boy smiled and waved her goodbye when she went with her parents.
"You were that kid?" said Jane, surprised.
The boy smiled and said no word.
Jane smiled at him, asking again for his name. "I have no name, I'm a boy without an identity" he said, "but you can call me Harry".

The next day Jane woke up in her room. Rubbing her eyes and dressing up for school, remembering what happened to her. She couldn't stop thinking about that boy whose identity she won't ever know.
She got to school and met up with her friends, she lived like a normal girl for a day.
when she returned home, she walked slowly, thinking about the things she saw.


תגובות (8)

את צריכה להעביר את הסיפור לעברית או שלעביר אותו ז'אנר לסיפורים באנגלית :S
אבל זה נשמע מאווד מעניין >

11/07/2012 17:52

ואוו..סיפר נחמד,
העלילה ממש מעניינת!
וזה ממש חמוד שאת מאמינה בזה.. לכי תדעי אולי זה יתגשם מתישו? =]

12/07/2012 03:12

This story is amazing!
so intresting and suspenseful.
It is too bad you wrote it in english, because I hate English…
But surprisly I understood everything, well, almost everything, I did not understand the two recent sentences…

ועכשיו, בעברית- כי ככה יותר קל לי =]
אני אשמח אם תסבירי לי את 2 המשפטים האחרונים כי לא כל כך הבנתי מה קרה שם.
היא הלכה לבית הספר, כתבת כמו ילדה רגילה ואז היא חזרה הביתה ו…?

בכל אופן, מחכה להמשך בקוצר רוח. ואם יש לי טעוית דקדוק או משו (שאני בטוחה שיש) אשמח אם תגידי לי.
את כותבת מהמם!!!

נ.ב- מהספרים הבודדים שאני קראתי באנגלית היה כתוב on his/her face ולא upon his face…

12/07/2012 05:13

"היא חזרה לבית-הספר ונפגשה שוב עם חברותיה, חיה חיים של ילדה נורמלית ליום אחד.
כשהיא הגיעה כמעט הביתה, היא הלכה בצעדים איטיים- חשבה על כל מה שהיא ראתה"

12/07/2012 10:02

ו-upon זה מילה נרדפת ל-on

12/07/2012 10:04

וואי יש לך אחלה כתיבה באנגלית!!
וגם הרעיון פה ממש חמוד!!
מקווה שזה יקרה לכולנו חחח
XD

31/07/2012 09:44

חחחחחח הייתי שמחה לנער כזה, כל הזמן אני מדמיינת אותו חתיך, עם קוביות, גבוה, שקסי ו…. אחד מוואן דיירקשן!!!

01/08/2012 07:55

חחחחחחחח רציני?
וואן דיירקשן?

01/08/2012 08:09
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